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October 13, 2012
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Her name is nothing incredible,

It's only ever been a long letter

Just something

...that's

    not

     even memorable...

So she strives to be the best, sometimes better.

 

Her pain is something kept silent,

And even though no one cares to make it loud

She hides it

...although

     it's

      obviously pliant...

Only bending to the pressure of the crowd.

 

She lives in a world of solitude,

Only evaded by the necessary company

Which is always

...unwelcome

     when

       openly argued... 

Then it's something that's expressed as phony.

 

She's trapped in some kind of space,

where nothing's really worth her time

And everyday it's

...always

     the

      same case...

Her presence is what they consider a crime.

 

No one seems to notice her strife,

Much to her quiet displeasure

They wouldn't care

...she's

    considered

      a lowlife...

Her worth they do not accurately measure.

 

All her life she's been the keen and silent one,

But that seems like not enough to be

She wonders how

...they

    want

      her redone...

Or rather how to be the one they wish to see.

 

She's never had a moment of solid emotional shape,

Her turmoils always clashed within

But only if

...it

    were

      to escape...

They would know she'd been the first to sin.

 

Sometimes she wants to cry,

scream and crumble and rage

But other times

...she

    wants

       to die...

To eternally, finally, forever be freed from her cage.

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Another time, in another way, in another style maybe I'll redo this. It's not that good...
Finished at 4:47 P.M. Comment. Leave some constructive criticism. Hate it. Love it. Be honest.
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this is amazing :)
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~Elizabeth-R-12345 Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~! <3 :)
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~Van-Dunkelschreiber Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it must have taken you a while to get DA to do the spacing right
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~Elizabeth-R-12345 Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It didn't actually. All I did was make the word and space the next under it so the first letter was under the second letter.
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~Van-Dunkelschreiber Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is quite an interesting style
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~Elizabeth-R-12345 Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And thank you. It took some time to ger it all right, lol.
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~Van-Dunkelschreiber Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome
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~Nightstripes0987 Oct 14, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'd hate to just fav this and leave, but I can't really describe how I feel about this. I love it, and can relate to it so much. These kinds of pieces let me know I'm not alone, which I need at times
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~Elizabeth-R-12345 Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank's for reading~!
You'd be rather surprised by all the people who are in relatable situations. I'm just gonna say this now, talk to someone that understand's. It might help if you feel anything like me. Thanks once again for commenting~! :)
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~Nightstripes0987 Oct 14, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I know how many people know what I've been through and am going through. Actually Right now I'm discussing some things that only I thought I knew about with a person who makes true, and great stamps
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